I used to be on a joke forum, and I miss it.
In the spirit of our forum, here is C&C.
This story is mildly amusing. On a scale of 1-10 it is a solid 5.
Perhaps if you had cropped the joke a bit less, and left it more open, or used photoshop to stretch the plot line a bit more, it would be more powerful. The composition and spelling was good. I don't like to be a pixel peeper, but the young lady in the story could be a bit more focused. I don't see her in my minds eye.
This may be just a matter of whether this joke works better when told verbally rather than written out, although the punch line is quite evident in the written version.
Keep working on this and keep submitting jokes and stories. IMHO, ROFL, LSHIPMP.
